Thursday, March 20, 2008

Nokota

Our owner strutted down the aisle of stalls, and past my stall, stopping at the one nearbye with an array of medals hanging loosly on the wooden doors. She stood, glaring intesly through the black metal bars at the horse that awaited her beatings and lashings. Her long blond hair was pulled up into a tight bun, and her newly polished chaps tapped the ground impatiently. Her red, lipstick caked lips were turned into a frown. Her hands lay crossed over her chest.
"Lets not be impatient now, you wouldn't want the consequences, would you?" came the high, strong voice of the women. A whinny was heard from inside the stall. "Thats what I thought." She hastily lifted the knotch on the stall door, and opened it, swiftly walking inside. A quick slap on the rump, and the noises of buckles and straps being attached and pulled, along with the swish of brushes, and metal being scraped into the hoofs of the horse broke the once, peaceful silence of the warm barn. A grunt of disaproval came from the harrased horse, he had submitted to the beast. The knotch was lifted again, and a chesnut gelding walked out with his lead rope in the hands of the predator. His eyes bore into the ground, too humiliated to see the concerned faces of the many other horses in the barn.

8 comments:

Hannah said...

Wow Sid this is really good, I like it! Your writing is so unique (don't worry in a good way) :) . Your words sound very fluent and smooth. I like this story because I love horses and I just love how your stories are so descriptive. I cannot wait until you post your next entry. I wonder what happens next. Good job and keep writing!:)

sidney said...

thanks habibi

raelani said...

i.Wow, you're a really talented writer! I thought that you had very vivid descriptions in your story. The characters are very distinct and have different personalities. Even the horse. Are you going to write more about this story?

horse@hrt/Marlee said...

I liked this entry because it has alot of great detail in it. The descriptions arrayed a perfect image in my mind of the barn stalls and the horse. I liked how you described the girl. Lipstick caked lips! lol
some people just don't know when too much is too much! I could see her perfectly too.

gracefulswan4@hotmail.com said...

Hey Sidney!! I really liked this entry because you had very good imagery. I want you tp write more on this story! I will definetely read it! Good job! Keep on writing!
Gracie

Layla said...

I like this because it has good description. I'm wondering. Is it about horses? You never know with you. You have amazing discritption. Keep writing

Alexis said...

I liked your entry because it was really detailed. I don't really know what was going on in it because I don't know much about horses. I still liked your writing though. I think your a really good writer. I also liked the pictures of your dog your blog but that doesn't really have anything to do with blog comments.

sidney said...

thank, thank you!